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Peer reviews should provide feedback to a peer on the criteria expected in the paper. The Feedback Form is located in the course shell. Follow these instructions:

Receive a classmate’s paper from your professor (in class if on-ground; via discussion thread if online).
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Comment on all criteria, noting strengths and / or areas for improvement on the feedback form.
Provide completed Peer Review Feedback Form and classmate’s paper as directed by your professor.

Note: On-ground students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor during the class meeting in which the paper is reviewed; online students should submit the feedback form and paper to the professor via the course shell.

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Identify the course, assignment, and date.
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Identify areas for improvement, where appropriate, and recommend improvements.

The specific course learning outcomes associated with this assignment are:

Recognize the elements and correct use of a thesis statement.
Recognize transitional words, phrases, and sentences.
Identify effective sentence variety and word choice.
Identify positive qualities and opportunities for improvement in writing samples.
Analyze the rhetorical strategies of ethos, pathos, logos in writing samples and for incorporation into essays or presentations.
Correct grammatical and stylistic errors consistent with Standard Written English
Recognize how to organize ideas with transitional words, phrases, and sentences

Vaccinated vs. Unvaccinated: Should our children be exposed to one another?

Holly M. Isakson

Professor Holly Sprinkle

ENG215-Research and Writing

February 1, 2014

To send my vaccinated child to school with other children who aren’t vaccinated is the real question? What’s are parents to do? I would sure like to think that I can do everything in my own power to help prevent a serious disease from infecting my child, and the only thing that will help is a vaccine, then yes, my children will be vaccinated. I was vaccinated as a child and so wasn’t my husband and many others that we know. Of course we all want to believe that all the vaccines we allow to be injected into our bodies are a 100% safe, but it just isn’t the case, no vaccine is. In fact, according to Livestrong.com, “Since 1990, there has been 30,000 cases of adverse reaction to vaccines and 13 percent of these side effects have resulted in disability, life threatening illness, hospitalization and worse, even death. These numbers alone, are not going to change my mind. So, we ask ourselves, do we send our vaccinated children to public schools with non-vaccinated children?

Many diseases that were once quite common are now preventable thanks to the development of vaccines. A 2003 study by researchers at the Pediatric Academic Society showed that childhood vaccines prevent 10.5 million cases of infectious diseases, reports Procon.org. (Livestrong.com). It all started with a man named, Edward Jenner who was a country physician from England who created the first vaccine in 1796, according to Harvard Medical School. (Livestrong.com) He was responsible for developing the small pox vaccine which changed the course of vaccines. Allowing the door to be open for others to follow in Jenner’s footstep. With this being said, it is not like these vaccines haven’t been around forever. Of course with time, comes change and debate. Fast forward a few centuries to the present day and consider the advances in medicine. With all the change over the years, comes debate, which brings us to the buzz going around about child vaccines and the possible dangers of interactions with none vaccinated and vaccinated children in public schools, but it is much more than just a public school issue and a personal opinion that will allow me to put this research paper together. Focusing on just one side is narrow minded and offering different sides to the debate helps me as a parent to make a safe decision for future vaccines and what side to be on in this heated debate between parents of both sides. I thought I had already made up my mind before this paper, but have questions that need to be answered to a few questions. I do choose, to take a stand to prevent further spread of the diseases and viruses that are out there, because it’s not like they have completely disappeared. I will take a look at the background of how vaccines actually work, the safety of them, and the overall effectiveness of the vaccine.

This is my overall debate. What is the big deal about sending our kids to public schools when we go out in public with our children on a daily basis and expose them to the harsh reality of our environment and the people in it who are unvaccinated and possibly infected with a disease that could have been prevented with a simple vaccine/booster? My instincts tell me no, that I don’t worry. It seems kind of ridiculous, but I still have to ask if my children are at risk? According to Education.com, “Because of high vaccination rates in the US and growing rates worldwide, incidence of such vaccine-preventable diseases such as measles, mumps and polio have decreased significantly over the last century. Worldwide measles alone decreased from 74% from 2000-2007. (Education.com) So, we see that vaccines do help, so why should children be punished because of their parents not wanting to vaccinate them or selectively choosing which one their children should get. So, does it mean that the children should all be kept apart because they are and aren’t vaccinated? I say no, but only in rare cases that only if another child has a life threatening disease such as cancer or AIDS because of their weakened immune systems.

I believe that it is the child’s parent who is responsible entirely to make sure they are only around vaccinated children during this sick period. As an avid participant of a local mommy and me group, we socialize our children every few weeks in local (libraries, parks, malls) private areas-pool, homes of other parents and children and never once has it come up. So, it must not be that big of a deal right? If there was an issue, I would assume that the parent would say something, but that is why vaccines are made to help stop the spread of diseases that weaken the immune system.

According to naturodoc.com, “The basic idea behind immunization is to produce a state of immunity to these childhood diseases we are administered them at such young ages to prevent the disease from infecting our bodies, and to build up our immunity. I know that prevention is just a shot away and I know as a mom that my place as a parent is to protect my little ones from getting sick in the first place. By keeping up with your annual vaccines, you reduce the risk of disease and the spread of infection. In reality this is the reason why these vaccines were made, to keep people safe. It has always been a debated topic between parents and other members of society, but only till recently does it seem that the debate and hatred towards vaccines is rapid, especially on the internet. It definitely has people debating on both sides of the fence and I want to take a look at this. Vaccines are vital in my opinion and not all parents and medical professionals think the same way, but the harsh reality is that they do help. We have all heard when going to the doctor that the side effects and risks long term or just in general outweigh the bad of the shot. I can honestly say that I have never heard my pediatrician say that any of the vaccines such as MMR or Whooping Cough are harmful and trust me, I am a worry wart. Now, when I ask my doctor for her honest opinion, I am putting faith into our doctor; my child’s life so to speak. They oversee the care of my child on a regular basis. I confide in her to help me get through some of these decisions. I rely on the fact that she is a mother too. I listen to what others have to say and read up on my pamphlets, but in my opinion it is the responsibility of the healthcare professional to guide us in the right direction as parents. Maybe I am wrong for wanting to trust my pediatrician, but there was no handbook when my children were born and so it goes for every other parent. I see the danger of not getting the vaccines to be more severe. If I were truly worried, I would have to be for the unvaccinated kids. They are breading grounds for germs and infections, but so aren’t all kids and adults for that matter.

In the end, it is up to the parents if they don’t want to vaccinate their children. I don’t agree with their decision entirely. I am a concerned parent, but for me the good outweighs the bad in this situation and I would rather my child get some minor reactions than possibly die from not vaccinating them. I couldn’t live with myself knowing that there are vaccines out there for Whooping Cough, Tetanus, MMR and Polio which are only some of the major vaccines that honestly, should be taken by all. Our generation hasn’t see what it is like to be around people with these diseases and I pray that we never do. I am fine with my children being around others who are not vaccinated. We go out in public all the time, why should I be worried? Why should it matter if they are together in school? Looking at it from a non-vaccinated point of view, I can agree to disagree to why they wouldn’t want to vaccinate. According to Education.com, that in 1998, and explosive study suggested a connection between the MMR vaccine and autism, causing a frenzy of media attention and public uproar. Many refusing the vaccine for fear of an autism link…the information was later retracted on the 1998 study and the author was accused with scientific misconduct and as a precaution, studies have been released to debunk the connection between autism and vaccine. So, I can see why some would be hesitant of a decision as important as vaccinating your child, but scientific research proves that it isn’t linked and poses no threat to anyone.

In conclusion, vaccines are identifiably safe, effective and covered by most insurances. I believe that in order to protect our youth and growing population as a whole that everyone must read up on vaccines before getting them done. I think it is a smart idea to vaccinate your children. To each their own, the saying goes and it’s true. We are the only ones that can make the decisions for our children until they reach adulthood and then it’s up to them to make the decision to keep the immunizations going. From my research, I have found no proof or reasoning behind not being able to allow both vaccinated and unvaccinated kids to go to school together. I see the potential threat to others who have low immune systems and that I don’t think is fair to do to a child when that is something that is completely out of their own control. It is up to the doctors and parents to educate themselves and ask questions and get the answers they seek before making a decision such as this. I guess because I come from a family who vaccinates, that I find it alright. We can’t make people get vaccinated. So, what are we as parents in general supposed to do to protect our children? There are all kinds of walks of life on this earth and some, not so friendly and carry disease/infection/viruses and don’t care who is around. Do we make vaccinating, government mandated or do we continue to spread disease. It seems like population control to me, but that is my opinion.

References

Garrett, R. (Updated on Sept. 28, 2009.) The Vaccine Debate. Retrieved on January, 27, 2014, from http://www.education.com/magazine/article/The_Vaccine_Debate/

Jernigan, K. (Updated on Jan. 26, 2014) The Pros and Cons of Vaccinating your Children. Retrieved on January 27, 2014, from hhtp://www.livestrong.com/article244854

Jones, Eric S. (1999-2012) Immunizations. Retrieved on January 26, 2014, from hhtp://www.naturodoc.comlibrary/children/immunizations.htm

www.vaccines.gov (haven’t used in research yet.)

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